Comments on: Dragon Wars: Land of Myth Chapter One II

By: admin

admin — Thu, 06 May 2010 14:36:52 +0000

@Alia: yup it should. Thanks!

By: Alia

Alia — Thu, 06 May 2010 14:31:45 +0000

“The one calling for help while I was looking Lydia?”

Shouldn’t that be, “The one calling for help while I was looking FOR Lydia?”

By: Becka

Becka — Sat, 10 Apr 2010 19:00:41 +0000

Thanks, I’ll amend that/

By: A. M. Harte

A. M. Harte — Sat, 10 Apr 2010 17:29:02 +0000

Little note — you wrote “She dropped the binoculars to her chest and held her arm out to the creature without any thought to its talons.”

I assume Lydia is the lead POV character, therefore if she didn’t think about the talons, you can’t really mention her not thinking about them. Besides, that part of the sentence is made irrelevant by the following paragraph where she looks down in surprise — that tells the reader she didn’t even think about it.

By: Becka

Becka — Tue, 30 Mar 2010 23:47:14 +0000

Hiya,

Thank you for the comment.

Yeah, they’re quadruplets (it’s actually possibly the least weird thing about their lives).

The reason Bennu was right there was the portal was deliberately opened near him. The relationship between human and heart friend will be explored more throughout the story.

I haven’t read the Dalelands quartet but I’m a big fan of Howl’s moving Castle

Hope you continue to enjoy my little tale.

Thanks,
Becka

By: DungeonHamster

DungeonHamster — Tue, 30 Mar 2010 23:40:43 +0000

Sorry, “any imbalance” not “and imbalance.” Also, since I’m leaving another comment anyway, it occurs to me that Spellcoats is probably the best book in the Dalelands series to start with if you’re trying to keep that vibe of uncertainty, even though it was the third written (it comes chronologically first anyway, but it’s comparable to having read Magician’s Nephew without first reading The Lion, the Witch, and the Wardrobe, only more so).

So, right. Shutting up for real this time.

By: DungeonHamster

DungeonHamster — Tue, 30 Mar 2010 23:36:30 +0000

Well, that was … abrupt. Not that that’s necessarily a bad thing, just kind of caught me by surprise. Huh? heartfriend? So, some kids, who are apparently triplets (is Daniel one too? are they quadruplets?) receive a call to help some world via magic portal. So far so good. But then this heartfriend appears suddenly out of nowhere with no apparent relation to the call for help. Or was he called here too himself? The questions, the questions. I have high hopes for an appendix; I always did enjoy those historical appendices imitating those in the back of Return of the King. They answer so many questions without slowing the story or robbing it of and imbalance the author wishes to maintain in the audience.

Speaking of keeping an audience off balance, have you ever read any Diana Wynne Jones? She hardly knocks it out of the park with every book, but she seems to go for that a lot. Tends to write darkish books that remain whimsical enough and have happy enough endings to frequently get stuck in the children’s section of libraries. I’d recommend starting with the Dark Lord of Derkholm, but you might get a better feel for what I’m talking about in the Dalelands quartet.

Anyhoo, I’m rambling now, so I’ll just shut up and go read the next entry.

By: admin

admin — Sat, 09 Jan 2010 12:56:07 +0000

Thanks for the comment. I’ve corrected the typo.

“Five Children” = “Five Children and It”? I must be one of the few people on the planet who hasn’t read or seen that. Weird since I love fantasy so much.

By: Miladysa

Miladysa — Sat, 09 Jan 2010 12:11:32 +0000

I like Bennu!

There is a little feel of Five Children and It about this at the moment – which is a good thing, btw

(something I noticed, “depths her own heart”)

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